Happy International Book Day!
Hello guys
Happy International Book Day!
I hope you have taken delight in reading «Tuesdays with Morrie». I would like you to leave a comment with your view on the book.
Please try to write a comment without using the dictionary or checking grammar. Try to be spontaneous when giving your view. You must do this activity in a real way. That doesn´t mean you can´t pay attention to punctuation, grammar or vocabulary, but spontaneously as if you were really writing your view in class without notes, with no dictionary, etc.
You can by all means do whatever you want as you cannot be controlled, yet being aware of your real level is the best thing you can do in order to improve. Remember this task will not be evaluated. It is just useful for me to pay attention to possible positive aspects and negative aspects in order to know your real difficulties and take appropriate actions.
«Tuesdays with Morrie»
The novel tells the story of a dying man who wanted to die of the same way than he lived. When he knew his terrorific diagnosis, he realized that didn’t want to die like his favorite uncle.
Despite I imagined the final of the novel, to read Morrie’s story who went on living his life with humor and courage yet knowing that he was dying, it’s a great lesson of life.
I consider that, in these Tuesdays, the relationship between Mich and «Coach» (Morrie) got back until the end, after many years.
Altogether, it’s a real story of a distinct teacher who considered Love the best thing. According his words, Love always wins.
Hi Rafi:
This is a week review due to the fact that every single sentence has quite a lot of mistakes, grammar and vocabulary mistakes.
– a man who wanted to die of the same way than he lived > a man who wants to die in the same way as he lives (Remember to use the present simple in a review when talking about the plot)
-When he knew his terrorific diagnosis, he realized that didn’t want to die like his favorite uncle. > when he knows his horrible diagnosis («terrorific» doesn´t exist»), he realizes that he doesn´t want to die…(Remember to avoid contractions in formal reviews)
-Despite I imagined the final of the novel > Despite the fact I imagined the end of the novel/story (Revise «despite» when followed by a sentence)
-to read Morrie’s story who went on living his life with humor and courage yet knowing that he was dying, it’s a great lesson of life. > Reading Morrie´s story is a great lesson life/lesson in life as we can see how he goes on living his life with humor and courage yet knowing that he will die (Revise present continuous for plans (ie. he is visiting me next week), actions at the moment (ie. I am reading a book), temporary situations (i.e. I am living in Jaen).
I consider that, in these Tuesdays, the relationship between Mich and «Coach» (Morrie) got back until the end, after many years. > I consider that in these «Tuesdays» Mitch and Morrie get back their relationship (Revise verb pattern of «get back» =get back something and punctuation as you cannot use a comman after the conjunction «that»,)
-who considered Love the best thing. According his words, > who considers love as the best thing. According to his words,…)
You need to keep studying and revising grammar and learning vocabulary. Keep trying!
Were I to give my impression about this book. I would point out that this is the typical book in which someone remembers a special one on his life. And in this case, this special one is a teacher, Morrie Schwartz. Of course as consuetudly happens in this sort of books, this important man isn’t still more. He was only a deep memory inasmuch as the principal role in this roman who is the narrator (another modish in this “books about remembrance”) tells that he promised to the teacher to keep in contact. But he didn’t materialize his commitment. It’s not a surprise that the teacher died not in normal circumstance (as he can read in the chapter “The Syllabus”). And of course this in some sense weird death gives more strength to the blue of the remembrance.
Sincerely, if I were the writer I would try to avoid all this topics regarded to this kind of novels. So it’s topics that is one of the hated things in a book.
Hello David,
Here is my feedback:
The review is difficult to understand and it must be reread due to incoherent sentences , which makes reading and comprehension difficult.
Mistakes:
-someone who remembers a special one on his life > «one» replaces a noun, not a pronoun and «someone» is a pronoun > someone special in their life/ a special person in their life.
-And in this case that special one is > if we previously use «someone special in their life», we can´t use «that special one». If we use «a special person in their life», we can use «that special one» («one» referring back to «person», which is a noun). Frankly, I would not have used «that special one», but this is a question of writing style, I would have written «…someone who remembers somebody special in their life. And in this case, that special person is…» It sounds more natural.
-as consuetudly happens in this sort of books > «consuetudly» doesn´t exist and there is a subject omission > as it traditionally happens
-this important man isn´t still more > Do you mean «this important man is not essential any more»? This idea is not clear and it contributes to misunderstanding
-He was only a deep memory inasmuch as the principal role in this roman who is the narrator (another modish in this “books about remembrance”) tells that he promised to the teacher to keep in contact > this idea is totally incomprehensible. This is the type of mistake which is sometimes impossible to correct as the mistake is a coherence mistake. We don´t know who/what you are talking about when starting saying the principal role. Apart from that, the beginning of the sentence «he (Morrie) was a deep memory» doesn´t have anything to do with the rest of the sentence. What is the relation between the fact that Morrie is a deep memory and the fact that the narrator, Mitch, telling us that «he promised to the teacher to keep in contact»? Translate it into Spanish: Él era una memoria profunda/un recuerdo profundo hasta el punto de que el papel principal en esta novela que es el narrador cuenta que él prometió al profesor mantenerse en contacto?????»
-roman > novel
-promised to the teacher to keep.. >promises the teacher that he will be. Please revise «promise», that is, it’s verb pattern.
-another modish in this “books about remembrance” > another trend in these books of….
– But he didn’t materialize his commitment > Do you mean «he didn´t fulfil his mission» or «he didn´t fulfil his commitment»? If you want to use «materialize», you need to change the sentence like this «his commitment failed to materialize where «materialize» means «take place» (As I don´t know what you really mean, it is impossible to provide just one correction». Anyway, you need to use the present tense «he doesn’t fulfill his mission/commitment»/»his commitment fails to materialize».
– It’s not a surprise that the teacher died not in normal circumstance (as he can read in the chapter “The Syllabus”) > It is not a surprise that the teacher dies under weird circumstances. We use present tenses in reviews.
-(as he can read in the chapter…) > when writing «he» who are you referring to?
-this in some sense weird death > In a way/In a sense/In some senses, this weird death
-the blue of remembrance > the melancholy of…/the sadness of
-If I were the writer, I would try…. > a third conditional is more appropriate. If I had written this book, I would have tried….
-this topics > these topics
-one of the hated things about books > one of the hardest aspects to deal with/tackle when writing a book. Avoid vague language like «things».
You must be careful with the writing skill as your writing is the typical writing which is extremely difficult to correct due to the fact that the main problem is coherence as some sentences do not make sense. Rereading at this level must be due to a great number of advanced terms that the teacher may not know. But if rereading is due to incoherence, «Houston we have a problem».
I recommend reading different types of writings to start writing following a specific structure (review, essay, etc.) Apart from that, it is also crucial to learn about formal language when writing. In all the written tasks you have done and I have corrected you tend to write informally in terms of cohesion, I mean, as if you were speaking rather than writing (e.g. «.And of course…..//.But..)
Keep improving!
Thank you for your comments.
Well, it is one of those book that is worth to read beacuse the background. Although, the ending was clearly expected the way both characters display emotions and reflect on key aspects of life is compellig. Moreover, the vocabulary and the pace of the work make easier to read.
Hello Ernesto,
This is a week review. Why? The review is short so as to have so many mistakes:
-those book > those books
-that is worth to read > that is worth reading
-because the background > because of the background. What background are you referring to? What kind of background are you talking about? You need to give more details in relation to that background.
-Although, the ending……. the way > wrong punctuation afecting cohesion and coherence > Although the ending ……expected , the way
-The ending was…. > inappropriate tense > the ending is….(The present tense is the frequent tense used in reviews)
-compellig > compelling (mistake due to typewriting)
-the pace of the work > the pace/pacing/rhythm of the story
-makes easier to read > makes the book easier to read or makes reading easier
Apart from the mistakes, no grammar of the level (you just used a simple passive construction (e.g. the ending is clearly expected). In addition, you just used two connectors, one with a punctuation mistake affecting coherence and cohesion. Finally, you used just one adjective with a spelling mistake. Finally, there are some positive terms (display emotions, reflect on key aspects), but not enough.
Keep improving!
«Tuesday with Morrie» by Mitch Albom
In the first instance, this well-written book is as though-provoking one as we can believe. Thus, the plot revolves around an individual, Morrie, who is suffering from ALS, notwithstanding that he is going through a rough patch, he has got a positive outlook. As well as, he just always defend that there are a wealth of reasons to live. In fact, Morrie believes that upsides are said to outweigh downsides.
As far as I am concerned, were I to have to give my private point of view on the book, I would dare to say that it will not be my preferred volume. On the whole, it is crystal-clear to me that when it comes to reading a title I look for an enjoyable time; therefore, I do not have a soft spot for reading this type of books. In short, and to some extent, I had not been a pleasure time reading it.
Hello Rafa,
First off, the book is called «Tuesdays with Morrie», hehehe! Well, here is my feedback:
Generally speaking, there is a great effort to use C1 vocabulary and grammar of the level and in general terms with coherence. Congratulations for that! Now let´s try to correct a few mistakes:
-as though-provoking (spelling mistake >thought-provoking) one as we can believe > Do not use «one» to replace «book» in this structure. Why? «one» just replaces «book» and this structure is «as+ adjective a/an + noun + as». I remember you used this sentence or a similar sentence last year. > This well-written book is as thought-provoking a book as we can believe.
-,who is suffering from… > who suffers from (as the illness is a permanent illness)
-defend > defends
-Thus, > avoid this connector as you use it when starting talking about the plot. You are not talking about a consequence. «Thus» means «as a result of something just mentioned» or «in this way/like this». Therefore, it doesn´t make sense.
-As well as, >You can’t use «As well as» followed by a comma at the beginning of a sentence. In any case «As well,», yet honestly there are better advanced connectors than «As well,». Please go on «Oxford Learner’s Dictionary» to learn how to use «as well as» properly.
-ALS, notwithstanding that…. Use a full stop after «ALS» >. Notwithstanding that
-it will not be my preferred volume > it is not my preferred book/title. «Volume» is a book that is part of a series of books. «Tuesdays with Morrie» is not a volume. You tried to use a synonym for «book» and «volume» is not a good option in this context. Why not use «read»? «I would dare to say that it is not my preferred read» (lectura) or «it is not the kind of book I can have a passionate interest in»-
-my private point of view > my personal point of view. «Private» means «personal» but in the sense of «not to be shared with anyone else» and you are talking about giving information, that is, your viewpoint.
-I look for an enjoyable time > I try to spend an enjoyable time
-In short, and to some extent, I had not been a pleasure time reading it. > In short, to some extent I had not had a pleasant time reading it.
Keep reducing mistakes and always pay attention to coherence. This time there were few coherent mistakes, just a few ones (thus, look for, volume, private) and due to the fact that you tried to use synonyms, and this is a risk and we need to take risks. So well done in this regard! Nonetheless, mistakes are frequent being some of them basic.
Tuesday with Morrie
To be honest, I have to admit the fact that ,at the beginning, I thought was going to be the typical book tedious and dull, but it turned out to be a thought -provoking and haunted book, it made a lasting impression on me .
This book belongs to the autobiographical genre, the plot revolves around the meetings between an old professor psychology at University , who suffering from a degenerative disease called ALS , and his former student called Mitch. These meetings took place on the last fourteen Tuesdays of the old professor’s life., and every Tuesday was a reflection on aspects of life such as «Regrets», «Family», » Forgiveness», «Death»,…Every Tuesday was a real lesson of life.
It is a book full of reflections from of standview a man, who knows that he is in his final stage, and teaches us what is truly important in life, and, were to have to choose one reflection, I would choose ..»you have to know how accept the death», in fact, it is the way he faces death that struck me the most.
I strongly recommend it for young ,adult and older.
It is well worth reading.
Hello Marian,
First off, the book is called «Tuesdays with Morrie», hehehe!
It is clear you try to use grammar and vocabulary of the level, but your review has quite a lot of grammar and vocabulary mistakes. Apart from that, you have a serious problem with punctuation and cohesion in general.
-the fact that ,at the beginning, I thought was going to be the typical book tedious and dull > the fact that at the beginning I thought it would be the typical tedious and dull book (Are you in love with commas? Revise the punctuation rules in order to use commas appropriately. I don´t know when that will happen. I always say the same thing to you and you keep using commas everywhere)
-a haunted book («haunted» is an adjective which is used with buildings and people´s look)
-an old professor psychology > an old professor of Psychology
-an old professor psychology at University , who suffering from a degenerative disease called ALS > …… who suffers/suffering (Revise reduced relative clauses).
-These meetings took place on the last fourteen Tuesdays of the old professor’s life., and every Tuesday… > Punctuation mistake again. How can you write a full stop and then a comma? > …………..life. Every Tuesday…..
-«Death»,… > Punctuation mistake again > «death», etc. Every Tuesday was…./ «death», etc. and every Tuesday was….
– a lesson of life > a life lesson or a lesson in life
-from of standview a man, who knows that he is in his final stage, > from the standpoint of a man who knows…..
-, and, were to have to choose one reflection, I would choose ..»you have to know how accept the death», in fact, > . Were I to have to choose one reflection, I would choose the reflection stating that we have to know/learn (how) to accept death//Were I have to end up with one reflection, the reflection would be that we have to know…..(Punctuation mistakes again and other mistakes). Avoid direct speech in this sentence.
-it is the way he faces death that struck me the most. > that strucks me….
-for young ,adult and older > for young people, adults and seniors
Please pay attention to punctuation. It seems that punctuation is not as important as grammar or vocabulary, but it is as it contributes not only to cohesion, but also to coherence.
Two clear examples to see how important punctuation is:
Look at this sentence, with and without its comma:
Let’s eat Bob.
Let’s eat, Bob.
If you don’t see why the comma is so important here, glance at your friend Bob as you read the first sentence.
Look at this other example:
‘I love my parents, Dolly Parton and Martin Luther King.’ On reading this, most English speakers will have a good chuckle imagining that your parents are Dolly Parton and MLK. Things are much clearer with the Oxford comma: ‘I love my parents, Dolly Parton, and Martin Luther King.
Finally, when using an online dictinary to know a possible translation of a word in Spanish, it is very important to read all the information about the word. If we do not do it, we risk making unnecessary mistakes. For that, we need to use a monolingual dictionary. This is extremely important at C1 level. Apart from that, it is also essential to consult different monolingual dictionaries as not all the possible definitions of a word are on a specific online dictionary.
Keep improving!
On Christmas, I read a book called “Tuesdays with Morrie”. I have to admit that if my teacher had’t given it to read, I wouldn’t have chosen it.
The touching book tells the story about a teacher who was diagnosed with a degenerative disease. It was every Tuesdays when the story took place. Despite the fact that he knowed what the end would be, he didn’t throw in the towel. It is a hidden life lesson that was behind the story. Were I to give my point, I would add that it was not only a tought-provoking but also an insightful book.
Hello Nerea,
This is my feedback:
This is a week review. Why? The problem is coherence and the tense used to write the review. Let´s see:
-«If my teacher hadn’t given it to read, I wouldn’t have chosen it»> If you say «I wouldn´t have chosen it», you really mean you are not into this book. Consequently, your review must be negative. Did you mean «If my teacher had not asked me to read this book, I would have not had the opportunity to read it»? Your review is not negative at all.
-If my teacher had´t given it to read > I didn´t give the book to you. I asked you to read this book
The plot is normally told in the present tense. Thus, «….a teacher who is diagnosed….» «It is every Tuesday that/when the story takes place», «Despite the fact that he knows….will be…..he doesn´t…, «….that is behind…», «it is not only…., but also..»
There are no connectors, there is a serious mistake «knowed», and another silly mistake «had´t» (this last mistake is comprehensible as you need to type). There is another silly spelling mistake in «tought-provoking» > «thought-provoking» . If you use just two adjectives to describe the book, you cannot make spelling mistakes (this is a tip)
By the way, we say «at Christmas», and «on Christmas Day»
Good you used a second conditional with inversion and a cleft sentence.
Thank you for your comments. I tried to be spontaneous as you said, without checking neither the dictionary nor the grammar. I thought that you wanted an opinion, not a review. I used an idiom as well.
You are right, I wanted to say that: If my teacher had not asked me to read this book, I would have not had the opportunity to read it» also I forgot give you a recomendation.
I thought the plot is normally told in the past. It is a doubt that I allways have. So, if I have to write a review, should I write it in present time?
Thanks you again.
The plot in the review is in the present. A review involves giving an opinion.
TUESDAYS WITH MORRIE, BY MITCH ALBOM
I must admit that I am not a good reading-book person. Nevertheless, I use to enjoy reading when the plot of the book engages me. Besides, when someone starts reading a book like this, it is easily deductible what the final of the story is. Thus, with regard to the plot, I would say that the main point in favour is the fact that, when living a rough patch, people tend to review significant aspects of its lifes and try to teach others about how to be better in life. Not to mention when someone is near to death. All in all, had I to give my impressions, I would conclude that we all can learn some lessons about those things which are really important in life.
Hello JC,
Here is my feedback.
Mistakes:
-a good reading-book person > What do you mean «a good reader»? «reading-book» is not a word I have found on Oxford Learner´s Dictionary or any other monolingual dictionary. Apart from that, maybe you wanted to use a compound adjective with a noun and a present participle. In that case, you must say «I am not a good book-reading person. To learn more about compound adjectives, go on https://www.grammar.cl/english/compound-adjectives.htm If you do not want to make mistakes making compound adjectives, there are other advanced alternatives to express your idea. For instance, I am not into reading/I am not precisely a good reader/I do not have a passionate interest in reading books/etc.
-I use to enjoy > I usually enjoy
-deductible > deducible or predictable («deductible» is related to «that can be taken away from an amount of money you earn, from tax, etc.)
-its lifes > their lives (the referent is «people»)
-Not to mention > Go on Oxford Learner´s dictionary to see examples of sentences with «Not to mention» and pay attention to the punctuation of «not to mention» in the sentences provided. This is a mistake I corrected in «Grammar to be revised»
-We all can learn > We can all learn. Revise the position of «all». This is something which was already corrected in «Grammar to be revised».
-the final of the story > the end of the story
Good that you tried to use some grammar of the level (e.g. second conditional with inversion). You did not make mistakes with the order of the sentence «..what the…of the story is» (indirect question) and you made use of some expressions such as «rough patch» appearing in the student´s book and other terms like «I must admit», «a point in favour», «significant»….
Great that you used connectors (e.g. Nevertheless, Besides, All in all, with regard to, thus)
Avoid basic or vague vocabulary:
enjoy > take delight in
really important > extremely crucial/essential
about those things > those issues/aspects
living a rough patch > going through
Keep improving!
TUESDAYS WITH MORRIE is a very deep tale that makes you reflect on your oun life, the way you’re running it and the valuable things surround you.
The book tells the story of an old teacher man who is a terminal disease and a young man who was his student in the past. Their lifes will meet again but in absolutely different circunstances.
The plot brings a confrontation between a moving life where there is no time to enjoy the silence, the nature or even fellings like love or careness, and a peaceful life where the only target is getting happiness.
Tackling problems such as don’t be able to move yourself, be a very dependent person or even let others witp your ass, Mr Morrie focuses on spending time with people he loves and his old student Mitch is one of them.
The wise teacher wants to give Mitch the last lesson. He said ‘try to be close to those things you enjoy and try to be far from those that bring you problems’. Another reflection Morrie did was ‘Accepting your close death as your final destiny without shame and rejecton and preparing yourself to face it, will give you the chance to say goodbye to people you love and pass this episode in a calmer way’.
Overall and also because it is based on a true story and I’m totally in love with them, I would highly recommend this book. It’s a must-read for anyone who loves thought-provoking stories.
Hello,
Here is my feedback:
In general terms, it is not a bad review. It is clear you know to write in English and you have resources to face a writing task, yet I must let you know that there are some mistakes related to vocabulary, grammar, punctuation and cohesion that must be corrected. Apart from that, I cannot see in the review the grammar of the level explained this year (e.g. cleft sentences, conditionals with inversion, personal or impersonal passive constructions). By the way, try to avoid the use of «direct speech» more than once. When the student makes use of direct speech more than once gives the impression that he/she (they) want to avoid the indirect speech in order to avoid mistakes with tenses.
It would have been convenient to use more adjectives to describe books. There is only one «thought-provoking».
Vocabulary mistakes:
Spelling:
-oun > own
-fellings > feelings
-rejecton > rejection
-witp > whip
Wrong words or expressions or basic vocabulary
-the way you’re running it («run one’s life» is an informal phrase whose meaning is «to keep telling someone what they should do in a way that is annoying») > the way you lead your life/manage your life
-whip your ass (rude slang) C1 reviews tend to be formal
-Overall and also because > Overall, due to the fact that/owing to the fact that/bearing in mind that/etc.
-a moving life > Do you mean a «sad» life or a «turbulent» life? If you mean a «turbulent» life, «moving» is not a good adjective.
Grammar mistakes:
-the valuable things surround you > the valuable things surrounding you/the valuable things that surround you
-who is a terminal disease > who has a terminal disease/having a terminal disease
-lifes > lives
-enjoy …… the nature > enjoy…, nature
-Tackling problems such as
don´t be able to…. > not being able…
be a very….. > being …..
let other > letting
Punctuation:
-….to face it, will give… > no comma is used between the subject and the verb.
-Overall and ….. > Overall, ….
-«. or .» ? > go on https://www.grammar-monster.com/lessons/quotation_(speech)_marks_punctuation_in_or_out.htm
Cohesion
-…in love with them > avoid «them» to make reference to the characters if this is the referent of «them», particularly if the characters were mentioned in a previous paragraph. The pronoun «them» is away from its referent.
Thanks for your comment!
Keep improving!
Hi Pilar, thanks for the correction!
It’s a long time I haven’t written at all so it is much easier to me having mistakes. Well, I’d like to point some of the mistakes out:
To use the grammar structures you said, could I say…?
– For cleft sentences… It was the old teacher that wanted to give Mitch the last lesson; or What the old teacher wanted was to give hime the last lesson
– For conditional with inversion… Were to give my opinion, I would highly recommend this book.
– Passive… This exceptionally book has been told in the first person
I’ve just revised those structures so I don’t feel confident enough.
In the sentence I meant wipe your ass (I know it’s rude but it is literally from the book), for the sentence I should write instead a quick life and for I think I missed IN a terminal disease. Do they make any sense?. For the last correction them refers to true stories but I didn’ want to repeat it again. What should I write then?
Thanks again!
Hello Sandra,
Regarding the new grammar, your examples are correct. Just one thing, you wrote «Were to give…», and you forgot the subject. The common tense in a review when dealing with the plot is the present tense. Consequently, I would use the present tense in those structures. For instance, «It is the old teacher that wants to give…»/What the old teacher wants is to give him the….» etc. Besides, when referring to personal and impersonal passive constructions I mean: «It is thought that this book is a masterpiece» or «This book is thought to be a masterpiece.
Try to use them next time when writing!
It doesn´t really matter that «wipe your ass» appears in the book. That expression is rude slang and it should be avoided when writing a review, basically owing to the fact that the review tends to be formal. You can be informal when writing a review if you are required to write an informal one.
As for «them», I thought the referent was the characters as «them» makes reference to a plural noun and you wrote «..based on a true story..». To be honest, I would use a synonym for «I am in love with them», for instance, «Overall, taking into account that the book is based on a true story and I am into reading books based on real-life events/I take delight in reading books….//I have a passionate interest in books.. //I am a big fan of books based….», I…»
Well, If the book wasn’t compulsory I would never finish it because the beginning is rather sad and this fact put me off the book. Nevertheless, as I was reading, the book hooked me and became a real page tuner. Despite the fact that the predictable end, I enjoyed the book because of the message: make of the most of your life giving importance to your family, friends … instead of being materialistic
Hello Elena:
This is my feedback:
As I always say to you, you know to write English, but you need to reduce mistakes. In a short writing like this, you cannot make mistakes. Apart from that, try to avoid basic words such as «enjoy» and «because». You used some connectors (e.g. «Despite»/»Nevertheless») and useful expressions, which is very positive.
-Well, If > Well, if…
-if the book wasn´t……> if the book had not been compulsory, I would have not finished it. The second conditional is not the most coherent conditional sentence here.
-because > «since»/»as»/etc.
-a page tuner > a page-turner
-enjoyed > took delight in
-…message: make…. > message, that is, make….
-make of the most of > make the most of….
Keep reducing mistakes!
Review “Tuesdays with Morrie”
When I first noticed that the book’s argument was death I was tempted to leave it. We have enough of that in the news this days. But as I was progressing in the reading I realized it wasn’t death, but life, the main theme of the text.
Tuesdays with Morrie is the story of the final days of sociologist Morrie Schwartz, who suffers from ALS, and how his life becomes more and more rich and meaningful for him and all around, as death gets closer. Mitch Albom, the author of the novel, is too one of the main characters, given that he has the responsability to document all the process.
What are the important things in life? Are you the kind of person you wanted to be when you was young? With this uncomfortable questions has to deal Mitch, who decided to change his life. To be honest, it hasn’t been a walk in the park. Tuesdays with Morrie es a thought-provoking book that definitely is worth a read.
Hello Laura,
This is my feedback:
The review is weak due to the frequent mistakes:
-the book´s argument > the book plot or the plot of the book
-to leave it > to stop reading it
-this days > these days
-progressing in the reading > reading more and more
-I realized it wasn’t death, but life, the main theme of the text. >….it wasn´t «death», but «life» that was the main theme of the text/book (Try to use a whole cleft sentence)
-Tuesdays with Morrie > Use single inverted commas (BE) or double inverted commas (AE) when mentioning the book: «Tuesdays with Morrie»
-more and more rich > richer and richer
-meaningful for him > meaningful to him (Revise the difference between «for me» and «to me» https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5_zuPfI9a-E)
-, as death gets close > no comma before «as», «because» or «since»
-…is too one of the…> is also one of the….
-, given that….. > no comma before «given that…»
-responsability to document all the process > has the responsibility of sharing with us all the process which Morrie goes through/telling us all the process….
-you was young > you were young
-With this uncomfortable questions has to deal Mitch, who decided to change his life. > This is the perfect idea to use a cleft sentence: It is these awkward questions that Mitch has to deal with in order to change his life.
-es > is
-that definitely is worth a read> that is definitely worth a read/that is worth a read, definitely
Try to reduce mistakes, try to use advanced connectors and use grammar of the level.
Keep improving!
Thank you for the feedback😄
I began reading ‘Tuesdays with Morrie’ in Christmas. Nevertheless, I haven’t finished until this weekend. Maybe this fact gives you a clue about my viewpoint on this book…
The book is written in first person which is something I like. Most of it is written in a past tense but there are parts that are in present. Those parts in present tell the past story and this is a bit confusing, especially during the first chapters.
Overall, I don’t like the story but in this second time I’ve read my opinion was better I previously thought. There are positive teachings. However, they’re covered with a sad story of illness, dependency and death. Also, there is a dangerous idea some people may get ‘Death is not such a bad thing so I’m going to pack my luggage and kill myself’. Maybe it’s because of the last tv series I saw, but suicide is a delicate issue.
Were I to recommend a book to read, it wouldn’t be this. The first author that comes to my mind is Tolkien who also was a linguist. The Lord of the Rings is a very long book, but there are also shorter stories. Or other writers not so nerdish. There are hundreds. Nonetheless, when I read I want to enjoy it and have a good feeling.
Tuesdays with Morrie. Overall: 4/10
Tuesdays with Morrie. Overall: 4/10
Hello Francis:
This is my feedback:
The review/opinion is week due to the lack of advanced vocabulary. Apart from that, there are grammar mistakes, not to mention the fact that some ideas are not clearly expressed due to the incorrect incorporation of sentences into speech and the omission of some words or words which are not the most exact ones.
Mistakes:
-in Christmas > at Christmas
-haven´t finished until….> I didn´t finish reading it/I didn´t finish it until last weekend.
-…book… > book.
-written in first person > written in the first person
-in first person which is something I like > in the first person, which is something I like (Revise the punctuation with «sentential relative clauses». They add extra information, particularly an extra comment on a previous whole idea. Try to avoid «like»)
-in a past tense > in the past tense
-in present > in the present tense
-Those parts in present > Those parts in the present/ in the present tense
-the past story… This idea is not clearly expressed > Those narrative parts in the present tense tell past events in the story and there are shifts in the tense used from present to past…
-I don’t like the story but in this second time I’ve read my opinion was better I previously thought. This idea is not clearly expressed > The first time I read the book I didn´t like it, but the second time I had to read it/I read it my opinion was better than it had previously been/The first time I read the book I was not into it, yet the second time I had to read it/I read it I didn´t like it either, but my view on the book changed a bit and it became more positive.
-However, they´re covered with….> they are transmitted through a…
-…The first author that comes to my mind is Tolkien who also was a linguist. The Lord of the Rings is a very long book, …» > This part of you review is a bit confusing due to the use of some words and punctuation mistakes > Taking into account the idea previous to this one «Were I to recommend a book to read, it wouldn´t be this», it would have been more coherent to start the following sentence like this: «The first book that comes to my mind for you to read is «The Lord of the Rings», a quite long book by Tolkien, who was a writer and also a linguist».
-, but there are other shorter stories. Or other writers not so nerdish. > Cohesion here is not good enough > ,but there are other shorter books and other writers not being as nerdish as Tolkien. («books» rather than «stories» as you mentioned «book» before when talking about «The Lord of the Rings». Besides, «. Or..» is not the appropriate way to start a new idea which could have been part of the previous one (e.g. «…other shorter books and other writers….»).
-There are hundreds > There are hundreds of what? (Be more specific as we don´t know when you write «there are hundreds» if you are referring to «hundreds of shorter books or hundreds of writers different from Tolkien or to both «shorter books and writers different from Tolkien».
-…when I read I want to enjoy it and have a good feeling. Try to rewrite this sentence using more advanced vocabulary as the terms are basic. For example, «when reading I am looking forward to taking delight in reading and having a positive feeling».)
Keep reducing mistakes!