Writing C1.1 (Sample)

Hello, 

Here is a writing task written by a  C1.1 student last year in June , a good composition in terms of coherence/cohesion, grammar and vocabulary.  There are some mistakes but they are occasional as it is required at this level. 

Dear Mr. Smith, 

I am a reader of your magazine and I am writting on behalf of some other readers. The aim of this letter is to bring to (1) your notice some of the consequences that tourism may bring to (2) our environment. 

There are considered to be several positive effects when it comes to mass tourism, being the main one the economic impact in > on some local and regional areas, especially in > those  which are severely deprived. 

Furthermore, receiving people from other countries may help us broaden our horizons as well as (to) become more tolerant towards other cultures. 

Conversely, we may not forget the evidence that some drawbacks are also related to this growing phenomenon. By way of illustration, were we to receive a massive arrival of tourists, some secluded and unspoilt areas would be highly damaged. 

Moreover, it is seasonal employment that springs to mind when approaching this matter, In that sense, the real economical > economic impact wouldn´t > not have a paramount relevance. 

Kindly requesting you to > that you look into this dilemma and to > – decide upon the convenience of publishing these ideas in > on your magazine (online magazine), thank you for you time and prompt attention. 

Sincerely, 

Marián Jiménez

Task fulfillment: 10 

Cohesion and Coherence: 20

Grammar: 35

Vocabulary: 25